Pass the story version 1

WALT: Punctuate our work


Original version:

Once upon a time their was a wouderest person that lived in a lost jungle and that person’s name was shaina. When shaina and her dad went hunting they saw something misterious in the woods it, had a lite read tail with a dragons beak and it had a strange roar and it was really scared. She sarted to run and dad they  was screming so loud he like ahhhhhhhhhhhh. But the dragon was nice so suddenly shaina walked towards the dragon.shaina slowly waked towards the dragon that looked hungy. The dragon started to starved, shaina gave some food to the dragon. As soon as she gave him food the dragon disappeard and went back to its home and also what was cool was when she gave him food he turned into the colour purple then he went back. Then shaina and her dad also went back home and had dinner. 

Edited version 

Once upon a time, in a far far away land where there was only two people that live on that land.  Their was a wonder-est person that lived in a lost Jungle and that person’s name was Shaina. When Shaina and her Dad went hunting they saw something mysterious in the woods it, had a lite read tail with a Dragons beak and it had a strange roar and it was really scared. She started to run and Dad was screaming so loud he was like Ahhhhhhhhhhhh. But the Dragon was nice so suddenly Shaina walked towards the Dragon. Shaina slowly waked towards the Dragon that looked hungry. The Dragon started to starved, Shaina gave some food to the Dragon. As soon as she gave him food the Dragon disappeared and went back to its home and also what was cool was when she gave him food he turned into the color purple then he went back. Then Shaina and her dad also went back home and had dinner. At the end they lived haply ever after and. The Dragon got to live his wonder-est life. 
THE END 

Task Description:

We played a game called' pass the story.' We would write a little bit of the story, and then pass it to the person next to us. They would the continue on the story. After the story was finished, we edited it to make sure it was punctuated properly.